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Post by Seshtah on Sun Apr 27, 2008 10:07 am

I made this thread for two reasons, one because for some reason I've been doing a lot of poetry lately and I wanted to post it, and two to get Kitty's oppinion. I don't give a damn if you are an expert in poetry or not XP

Oh, and all the crappy spelling in the second poem was intentional, just so you know...


FATE
The wheel never stops turning
turning
turning
A perverse game of "Jeopardy", but money is
not
the object of the game
The game is your life
and the prize?
Your fate.
Sound fun?
No?
But itís only begun!

The wheel turns
turns
turns
and spins
spins
spins
going from nowhere
to loom before you
its great shadow hiding three
who watch the wheel spin
spin
spin

and that is what they do
It is she who twists the thread
who twists your life
It is she who weaves the thread
that weaves your future
It is she who cuts the thread
that rips it all away
sending you to
darkness

So are we free?
Free to chose?
Free to turn away and do as we
will?
But of course
The future is in
thread
not
stone

She who twists creates you

but she who weaves adds only
opportunities
She keeps the skein
this giant loom
free of tangle
a task at which she must stay vigilant,
for humans are
Chaotic
by
Nature

And she who cuts does only when the
pattern ceases to
aid the
Grand Design
Complain all you like
but
Don't.
Blame.
FATE


n00b peorty

this nite is so
amusing
i kno i am
abusing
these words but its so
fun

no capitals
or punctuation
it really isnt
done

well guess what
it is now
so youll just have to
cope
ill be done soon
well soon enough
or thats what u
hope

propr englsh
it rly iz 2 much
y bothr w/ it
if i got u 2
do dat stuff

randomness and crazi
things
birds with
paws
and dogs with
wings

its really late now
i hav 2 go
no
save yur horray
not to wori
ill b bak
to bug u
another day


I Wish

I wish I could say that

I don't care

when you
hold Her hand
look at Her like that
share that quiet joke

I wish I could say that

I don't

paint on a little smiling
mask
every time I see you two
that

I don't

cry

when no one's looking

that I can

move on

I wish I could say that

I'm not

Hurt

Broken

Jealous

Confused

Angry

Frustrated

Understanding

Hopeful

Lost

Worn

I wish I could say that

all of it
but I can't

...I wish I could though

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Post by Alucard-evil on Fri May 02, 2008 2:21 pm

Um Sesh...no lying...as I sometimes do poetry myself...you're stuck on spinning and turning and twisting >< and it's rather doesn't have any rhythm. Well, it depends on how to read it >< sorry Sesh for being so rough and icy. But I'll better criticize, then tell you sweet lyes.

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Post by Seshtah on Sat May 03, 2008 8:50 am

Thats what I wanted! Honesty!

It had rhythm in my head but I guess I didn't get it to come out right *plots* was that with all of them or just one in perticular?

The first one was supposed to be stuck on spinning, turning and twisting though. That one was intentional XP

And you did realize that the change of color signalled a new poem right? XD

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Post by Alucard-evil on Wed May 14, 2008 11:43 am

Ya of course I've understood that it was the start of new poem. The problem is, that I've read only first poem xD of course I saw rhythm in some areas, but you know I might haven't saw the rhythm, because I'm not American and not an English speaking person, it's like different look and also I'm don't know English perfectly, so I might haven't just read it right. In any case, it might have perfect rhythm, but I don't like the idea of 1st poem >< sorry Sesh, but I hardly like poems at all. Well here it is :]

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Post by Seshtah on Wed May 14, 2008 7:23 pm

I keep forgetting that--sorry Kitty >.< And you are allowed to have your own opinions.
Besides, things have been known to work inside my head, but once I say or write them, they don't work as well anymore lol XD

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Post by Alucard-evil on Wed May 14, 2008 7:28 pm

SAME HERE!!! When I was writing a poem for birthday girl. Everything I was think had rhythm and stuff, but when it got on the paper, I said...SHIT IT TOTALLY SUCKS!! xD It's hard to make something perfect as in poems, especially when there's so much different point of views :] and btw there's nothing for you to apologize for ^.~ meow =^.^=

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Post by Seshtah on Wed May 14, 2008 7:31 pm

That's why I don't bother with rhyming for the most part. Too much work.
I wasn't appolgizing I was...uh... explaining why it might not have rhythm everywhere *nods* yeah,, that's what I was doing lol

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Post by Alucard-evil on Wed May 14, 2008 7:50 pm

lol xD Sesh like always - Sesh xD Ya I also don't get what I've said, but you're funny like always Very Happy

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Post by Seshtah on Wed May 14, 2008 8:00 pm

*bows* I try X3

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